i made this story for a school essay plz check over my writing so i can get a good grade thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!! sorry if there are some spelling errors or stuff like that i will fix them.

THE WAY WE ARE

I had always been shy as a child some may have even called me weird I barely had any friends in fact I had none but that all changed. it was my second semester maybe in the early April at my new school prince high I had always picked the seat in the back corner on the left side and normally no one would sit next to me. almost hallway through the class a girl busted through the door I guess you could say she looked ill very skinny and weak in the knee's she trembled to the seat next to me I looked at her as if she was crazy no one has ever sat next to me before did she even know who I was? she looked around the class everyone was whispering and pointing at her she looked at her desk ashamed of herself. the teacher finally spoke up " I see you are late...." " its Amelia miss" said the girl still looking at her desk. " I expect you not to come that late again Amelia I was told to expect great things from you, know back to work class" the girl started to slowly look up at the board but then turned to me. " are you an outcast to?" "I guess you could say I am." " perfect lets meet up after school in the front near the pick up line" she said with a grin I was so confused what was she planning in that head of hers. it was five thirty I had been waiting for more than twenty three minutes where was she? she ran out tears in her eyes and then she tripped a boy came out of the school with gun in his hand bared to the girls head. " why are you doing this please don't hurt me" tears where running down her face " don't you want to be freed from this world as sick as you are we might as well say you have cancer am I right I know I am don't think of this as I'm doing it just to do it don't you wanna end this pain all this suffer that you have faced over the years" he said laugh with a sick look on his face " your just like me sick so whatcha say lets end this together." i didn't know what to do i stood there in fear but then something happened to my body my legs started moving they where running towards the boy but then he panicked and pointed the gun towards me his finger on the trigger i was only a couple feet away from him. his finger slowly pulling back the trigger i saw a very faint silver bullet come out and shoot me in the stomach i fell back clutching my stomach screaming with pain and then everything went dark. she saw me close my eyes and ran over to my body holding me in her arms but it was to late the boy picked up the gun again and put it to the girls head he pulled the trigger the last thing i could see was her face sickly ill I looked at her will a smile and then she collapsed the last picture of her holding me in her arms.

THE END

Answer:

I think it's good

Explanation:

But melodramatic. o.0

Answer:

You do have some grammatical errors here... But I'll help you! You can copy and paste this if you need to. All you needed to do was this (below)

I rewrote it, but with little to no errors. Its still your story.

I changed it to:

THE WAY WE ARE

" I had always been shy as a child and some might have even called me weird. I barely had any friends in fact, I had none. But all that changed. It was my second semester in early April at my new school, Prince High. I had always picked the seat in the back corner, on the left side. Almost no one would sit next to me. Almost halfway through class, a girl busted through the door. I guess you could say she looked ill, very skinny, and weak in the knees. She trembled to the seat next to me as I looked at her as if she was crazy. "No one has ever sat next to me before. Did she even know who I was?", I thought. She looked around the class and everyone was whispering and pointing at her. She looked at her desk, ashamed of herself. The teacher finally spoke up. "I see you are late....", she said. "It's Amelia miss.", said the girl, still looking at her desk. "I expect you not to come that late again, Amelia. I was told to expect great things from you. Now back to work, class." Said the teacher. The girl started to slowly look up at the board but then turned to me. "Are you an outcast too?" She asked me. "I guess you could say I am." I told her. "Perfect, lets meet up after school in the front near the pick-up line." She said with a grin. I was so confused. What was she planning in that head of hers? It was five thirty and I had been waiting for more than twenty minutes. Where was she? She ran out with tears in her eyes and tripped and fell. A boy came out of the school with a gun in his hand and put it to the girls head. "Why are you doing this? Please don't hurt me!". Amelia pleaded as tears ran down her face. "Don't you want to be freed from this world? As sick as you are we might as well say you have cancer, am I right? I know I am. Don't think of this as me doing it just to do it. Don't you want to end all this pain, all this suffering that you have faced over the years?", he said laughing with a sick look on him face. "You're just like me, sick. So what do you say? Lets end this together." Said Amelia. I didn't know what to do so I just stood there in fear. But then something happened to my body. My legs started moving! They were running towards the boy! He panicked and pointed the gun toward me and put his finger on the trigger. His finger slowly pulling back on the trigger, i saw a very faint silver bullet coming towards me. It shot me in the stomach and I fell back clutching my stomach and screaming in pain. Then, everything went dark. Amelia saw me close my eyes and ran over to my body, but it was too late. The boy picked up the gun again, put it to the girls head, and pulled the trigger. The last thing I could see was her face. Sickly ill, I looked at her with a warm smile. Then, she collapsed. The last picture of her holding me in her arms.

THE END

Explanation:

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Which conflict is most likely to get an audience interested in reading The Call of the Wild by Jack London? Buck fighting Spitz Buck injuring himself while sledding Buck pulling the sled after John Thornton made a bet Buck's internal struggle with his nature

Hi can someone help me with my English homework?

1.I...the windows all day without any help!Two more and I can have a rest.
I've been washing or I've washed

2.you look nice!Have you...your haircut?
been having or had

3.This time last year I...at university.
studied or was studying

4.Has someone...my special bread? There's only a little bit left
been eating or eaten

5.I've English for three years and soon I'm going to be using it at work.
been learning or learned

6.Sorry,I'm late!how long....?
have you been waiting or have you waited

7.when we saw the crime we...the police
called or were calling

and please explain for me about usage of simple verbs and continues verbs:)
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Is the following sentence in ACTIVE or PASSIVE voice? After two weeks on the raft, we were rescued.
A. Active
B. Passive

With my aversion to this cat, however, its partiality for myself seemed to increase. It followed my footsteps
with a pertinacity which it would be difficult to make the reader comprehend.
Where should one look to determine the correct pronunciation of pertinacity?
O atlas
O dictionary
O encyclopedia
Othesaurus

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Compare and Contrast “The Golden Cat” and “The Cat and the Moon” Essay Final Draft Your essay should include
• An attention-grabbing introduction with a thesis statement.
• At least three body paragraphs with topic sentences and supporting information from the readings.
• A conclusion that summarizes the main points of the essay and encourages your reader to think critically about its topics.
• Points of comparison that focus on imagery and/or tone and are organized through a point-by-point or block structure.
• Transitions that indicate the similarities and differences between subjects.
• At least five of your vocabulary terms used correctly in the text of the essay.
• An academic tone.
Your final draft should be free from mechanical and grammatical errors, including spelling, capitalization, and punctuation. It should also demonstrate significant revision by incorporating feedback from your classmates and your teacher.

What are elements of a body paragraph in a comparative essay? Select four options.
A details
B evidence
C examples
D a summary
E a thesis statement
F a topic sentence

How do fact and fiction allow you to view history in different ways.

read the underlined sentence on page 1 of Passage 1 which sentence from passage to most directly opposes the stated point of view​

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How is courage defined in this novel? -

What is the difference between a simile and a metaphor or hyperbole?
how strongly two things are being compared
how often a poet is using comparisons
how different two compared things are
how many things are being compared

read this pleaseeee
this happened today
It was spirit week and the teachers give us tickets and put numbers depending on how good you did
The highest is 5 tickets
And there is going to only going to be 1st place and 2nd place ONLY
AND WHOEVER LOSES THERE TICKETS DONT GET A PRIZE
Nor do they get instead of it
They left it, they left it



So in all days I got 5
Then today we can get more tickets by playing games
So everyone cheated it was so annoying
Then in the end we counted our points and I got 40 in total I was second place my sister was 1st place by getting 51 in total
Then guess what
EVERYONE GOT A PRIZE AND THERE WAS NO SECOND PLACE OR FIRST PLACE
NO PLACES
THERE WAS A GIRL WHO GOT 2 POINTS IN TOTAL
BELIEVE IT OR NOT
THAT GIRL GOT THE SAME SIMPLEST GIFT LIKE MY SISTER WHO GOT THE MOST POINTS
AND THERE IS THIS OTHER GIRL WHO LEFT HER TICKETS AT HOME AND SHE HAD 20 tickets
She lied and said she had 30 tickets
And they had pity and she got the best gift out of all of us
AND ALSO THEY SAID BRING CARDS
I WAS LATE BECAUSE I WAS LOOKING FOR MY CARDS ANS WE DIDNT EVEN PLAY
THEY ALSO SAID WE HAVE HALF DAY AND THEY CHANGED THEIR MINDS(they don't got no mind)
I HATE THE TEACHERS AND THE SCHOOL AND EVERYTHING

PLS HELP !!!!

PART A: Which of the following identifies the authors main purpose in the final section “Why is the News Sometimes Controversial”?

A. to provide readers with the pros and cons of new media and the best way to acquire truthful information

B. to encourage readers to not accept the information the news outlets provide them and seek answers on their own

C. to provide readers with the process required to publish an article to reassure them of the accuracy of the news media

D. to discourage readers from paying attention to the news and believing the information that it claims to be true

ARTICLE:

Reporters gather facts and write about them — so why do some people say the news is unreliable? They are worried that news stories might be biased. Bias is an unfair representation of something or someone. It can happen when only one side of a story is presented, when only certain facts are shared, or when news organizations choose which stories they want to publish. Readers sometimes worry that news organizations, intentionally or accidentally, publish biased stories.

News organizations try to avoid bias as much as they can. They hire trained reporters who know how to ask good questions about all sides of a story. They also employ many different editors to double-check all of the facts cited in the articles.

Readers of the news can take their own steps to avoid possible bias in the news they read. They can read news from multiple sources, or they can look up facts on their own to make sure the news matches other websites and records. It is impossible to avoid bias completely, but news writers and news readers can still do a lot to make sure the information they share and read is accurate.

Q2.. Discuss the challenges and benefits of living all year round in a place where people go on holiday.

40 children are taking there cats to the vet, 9 of the children are late. Multiply to get the answer.

Read the following implied thesis statement:
Legalizing recreational marijuana will not encourage teen-agers to use the drug.

Which choice below is the most effective supporting topic sentence for a paragraph in this essay?

A) There is no evidence that marijuana is a so-called “gateway drug” that leads teenagers to experiment with harder drugs or alcohol.
B) Marijuana is easy to access and many teenagers have tried it.
C) A recent study found that over that last decade, pot-smoking by teens has fallen to an all-time low, even as more and more states have legalized marijuana.
D) A CDC report states that 82% of American teens say they have been offered marijuana or other drugs.


Please help me make sure you put appropriate answer!!!

"MAMMA, how much longer have we got to ride?" asked Nan Bobbsey, turning in her seat in the railroad car, to look at her parents, who sat behind her.
"Are you getting tired?" asked Nan's brother Bert. "If you are I'll sit next to the window, and watch the telegraph poles and trees go by. Maybe that's what tires you, Nan," he added, and his father smiled, for he saw that Bert had two thoughts for himself, and one for his sister.
"No, I'm not tired of the scenery," answered the brown-haired and brown-eyed girl, "but you may sit next to the window, Bert, if you like."
"Thanks!" he exclaimed as he scrambled over to the place his sister gave up.
"Are you tired, dearie?" asked Mrs. Bobbsey, leaning forward and smoothing out her daughter's hair with her hand. "If you would like to sit with me and put your head in my lap, papa can go to another seat and -"
"Oh, no, mamma, I'm not as tired as that," and Nan laughed. "I was just wondering how soon we'd be home."
"I'd rather be back at the seashore," said Bert, not turning his gaze from the window, for the train was passing along some fields just then, and in one a boy was driving home some cows to be milked, as evening was coming on. Bert was wondering if one of the cows might not chase the boy. Bert didn't really want to see the boy hurt by a cow, of course, but he thought that if the cow was going to take after the boy, anyhow, he might just as well see it. But the cows were very well-behaved, and went along slowly.
from The Bobbsey Twins at School by Laura Lee Hope
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Which of these phrases helps the reader know the setting of the story?
A.
"Oh, no, mamma, I'm not as tired as that,"
B.
But the cows were very well-behaved
C.
and in one a boy was driving home some cows to be milked
D.
turning in her seat in the railroad car
Help ALL MY POINTS

what is the meaning of the word commit?

Ana will commit ten hours to volunteering each week.​

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Macbeth acts upon the Apparitions' siatements by ordering the murder of yet another family, and in so
doing, makes his own situation much worse. Who does Macbeth want to have murdered this time? How does this action make the potential enemy more motivated to oppose Macbeth?

Who showed up at the cabin as a complete surprise and how had he changed?

can someone please answer this ive been trying to get the answer but i cant

write a summary on rehema the house girl 10 sentences ​

How has global warming affected floods?

(3-4 reasons)

write down the function of technology in terms of academics


please Answer

People Indonesia So Handsome Adn Beutiful

Me people indonesia​

How was Elie first exposed to what the Germans were doing?
A.
Moesha the beadle told him
B.
Newspapers
C.
Radio
D.
Television

Which best describes point-by-point paragraph structure?

• The author introduces each point, followed by evidence and analysis of that point.
•The author introduces the evidence in the topic sentence and backs it up with a list of points.
•The author introduces all the evidence and concludes with the most important points.
•The author introduces the points in list form and provides all the evidence for each point at once.

PLEASE REPLY QUICKLY.

‘People have a responsibility to work together and help each other wherever possible.’
Write a speech for students at school to persuade them to do more to help the school and/or the local community.

Omae wa mou, Shideru

(b) Recall what you have learned about different genres, or types, of narratives and how to analyze a narrative. Then choose ONE short story you read for this course. State the author's purpose for writing the story (to inform or explain, to describe, to persuade, or to entertain) and summarize the main idea. Briefly discuss the techniques the author used (such as figurative language or metaphor). Evaluate the effectiveness of these techniques in achieving the author's purpose.

Which of the following inferences is best supported by the passage below (paragraph 7)?

Shakespeare’s tragedies and histories focus on complex individuals who seek to fulfill their full potential while also grappling with painful, difficult dilemmas. At the same time, his comedies are robust with jokes and songs that provide audiences with an escape from their own problems. From Puck to Hamlet and Falstaff to Lady Macbeth, Shakespeare’s canon portrays a complete range of human experiences.
Answer choices for the above question

A. Shakespeare’s writing was representative of popular humanist ideas of the time.

B. Shakespeare wrote plays in many different genres, but his histories were most popular.

C. Shakespeare wrote plays that are considered comedies, but the genre had a different meaning at the time.

D. Shakespeare is now considered one of the most famous writers, but he was not popular during his lifetime.